I won't flatter you though. If your story is good, I'll probably just put a little tag at the beginning to soften the plunge, because, in my experience, ego boosts don't create good fics.

I know I can come across as abrasive, sarcastic, and mean, but since I know that, I try to keep an eye on myself.

I'm not perfect, and I'll probably miss some things in your fic. That is another reason why I am so brutal. When one is treading lightly, one tends to miss a lot more than when one is nitpicking.

I should also warn you, I’m very free with commas. I love commas. When in doubt, insert a comma.

My beta-reading process consists of this:

I read the fic once on the computer screen, making mental notes.

Then I print it out and mark things with a green pen.

I go onto the computer and after each paragraph put things I would change, suggestions, and little bits of advice.

I always beta with the books beside me, to catch any details. If your fic is contrary to canon on purpose, let me know so that I don't get you for it.

I am a firm believer that no beta reader should insert his or her own words. The fic still belongs to the author, and they need to choose how best to incorporate the advice. Grammatical issues are easy to fix, but contextual and sentence structure issues are a little subjective, and my writing style might disrupt yours.

I will however, make example sentences when nescessary to get my point across. These sentences are not to be copied and pasted into your story. They are simply examples.

Below is an example of my beta reading in action:

As the train started chugging off, Penny settled herself in an empty compartment. A few minutes later the door slid open and there stood a shy-looking young girl. She had deep blue eyes adn long, wavy black hair.

Put a comma after later, it helps the sentence to read easier. This is a laid-back part of the fic.
Take out “young.” Girls are young. If you want a specific age, say “about __ years of age” or something similar.
“adn” should be “and.”
Your description of the girl is really lackluster. Everybody in fanfic has deep (insert color here) eyes. Long, wavy black hair isn’t very interesting either. What was it about her eyes and hair that drew attention to them? Mention some body language that showed that she was shy. Was her head bowed, was she scared? Did she lean comfortably against the compartment door? Does she have any luggage?

I hope I pass the test. Owl me if you’re willing to submit a story.