sorry I couldn't think of anything
Jadali: Well, that explains the whole thing. I guess we can go now.
Elspeth: Oh no you don’t. You started it, you finish it or I’ll make you MST those icky things Little Manga Neko wrote.
Jadali: *sweatdrop* Sitting now.
bad Max would say about Zack
Elspeth: I can think of thirty-four.
Jadali: You win. I could only come up with twenty-three.
for the way he treats Harmony I'm gonna add more X-5's later though but their not gonna have big parts 'K
Both: *sweatdrop* Uh-oh.
MAX’S P.O.V
Ok it’s still there Zack’s still watching Harmony like she’s more then a sister to him which in some cases I guess she is.
Jadali: Ugh. When are y’all gonna learn the difference between ‘than’ and ‘then’?! For those ignorant of the difference, ‘than,’ when coupled with other words, is a logical operator. ‘Then,’ however, is a conjunction. El?
Elspeth: (raises hand) Comma, please.
But this is Harmony we’re talking about the one who used to sing Lori to sleep when she had a bad dream. The one who used to think all of Zane’s dumb jokes were the funniest thing’s there were.
Jadali: That don’t exactly make her different. It makes her X5- Poppins.
The one who used to tell Zack to shut up and stop being such a jerk about stuff.
Jadali: Okay, make that X5-Poppins with a death wish.
Elspeth: And Zack isn’t really an overly communicative individual, to boot.
She used to smile at the guards of course Tim one of the guards thought she was so cute.
Jadali: Um, ’scuse me, but since when are children in camouflage fatigues and buzz cuts considered ‘cute’? Sounds more ‘scary’ to me. Kind of like the two-year-old you saw in Hitler Youth outfits.
He used to tell her stories while he walked us all some were and she’d tell us see Harmony used to smart-us all up if we made her mad she even smarted Lydecker up once.
Elspeth: Eh?
Jadali: Kinda wondering that m’self.
Elspeth: Translation: Harmony, in some sort of relationship with a guard, made the other kids study for pissing her off and Lydecker wasn’t excluded from it.
And Zack’s still watching her like he’s a teen-age boy with a crush it’s kind of sweet but ask Zack about it he’ll beat you up.
Jadali: Unless he’s done some pretty spontaneous aging, Zack isn’t really that much older than a teenager. And if the story is to be *cough* believed, he does have a crush.
Elspeth: "Ask [him] about it he’ll beat you up." Despite the lack of commas (again), finally we have some traces of genuine in-characterness!
Jadali: Um, is that even a word?
Elspeth: …It is now.
He never has been one to show his feelings Harmony’s arguing with Logan their both right but how can you tell them that.
Jadali: I’m thinking a question mark would be a good start, rhetorical question or not.
Elspeth: And there’s that there ‘their, they’re and there’ problem.
Jadali: Where?
Elspeth: There.
Jadali: AARGH!
Zack’s staring out into space well out the window but same thing "Zack what’s wrong?" I ask but of course I know its Harmony she’s what’s wrong
Jadali: Well why did you ask if you know?
I love her she’s my sister and I love Zack he’s my bro but they have to wake up.
Elspeth: Phew, I didn’t think that sentence was ever going to end.
Jadali: Yeah, you gotta watch the little buggers. They’ll make your head explode.
"Nothing Max I’m just thinking’’ he said yeah he’s thinking about Harmony "Zack I know you care about her we all did and still do why don’t you show it" I ask he winced good serves him right.
Elspeth: (holding head) Ow…
Jadali: (smugly) I warned you. Oh, dear Eris, will somebody PLEASE punctuate this sentence?! And oh, yeah… *sticks her head into hammerspace* Yo! Zack! The nice author made you ‘wince’ like a pussy! (no pun intended).
Zack: (unintelligible strangled screaming sound)
Me and Zane were the one’s she told about what happened with Zack that day.
Jadali: Always with the excess apostrophes.
Elspeth: Maybe she was aiming for commas all this time and hit the wrong key.
I was the one who listened and Zane was the one to hold her while she cried not Zack he was the one who made her cry. Not Zane not Me not Tinga not Brin not Ben not Sly not Krit
Jadali: On behalf of Syl, who has been referred to as ‘Sly,’ I’d like to express my disgust at the utter lack of proofreading.
but Zack it’s his fault she cried and he’s going to have to live with it forever because if he hurries he maybe he can see the girl she once was one last time.
Elspeth: Well, that made no sense whatsoever.
Jadali: Ditto. Might as well plough onwards.