Here was another attempt at a rewrite, but it really just... ah... fades into dribble. Though it does have SOME literary merit. I intentionally started with the insubstantial and then concreted it. And the "I dessert with Sonnet beside / I eat of Sonnet's icecream sauce" is an allusion to eating icecream on the couch with her (after dinner, hence at night and... quite frankly, watching Scooby Doo even if that's not mentioned:) Scooby rules! And I tend to smoosh and let my icecream melt a lot of the way first because I like it more when it's little icecream particles in an icecream sauce so to speak, heh. Regular icecream hurts my teeth and is too cold to taste anyway:)

I LIVE WITH SONNET (bad version)

I wake with Sonnet by my side 
I brush with Sonnet's reflection. 
I eat with Sonnet's spectre 
and walk with Sonnet's projection. 

I part with Sonnet's inexistence 
I stare at Sonnet's face unseen 
I talk with Sonnet's apparition 
and marry the Sonnet bride to be. 

I talk with Sonnets astern to others 
I glance at Sonnet's schedule 
I rush to Sonnet's home in time 
for Sonnet's face incredulous 

I sup with Sonnet from across, 
I dessert with Sonnet beside 
I eat of Sonnet's icecream sauce 
and retire at Sonnet's bedside.

Copyright Š2002 Ashi Shadow