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Did I ever tell you Morning wakes and a dull ache settles over my heart. Healing salves try their best but nothing is able to remove the pain. It's like I've acquired a permanent disability in my heart. Some days mild, some days severe, all from loving you even after you're gone. Of course I don't want a permanent disability, in my heart. But if getting rid of it means stopping loving you then, I don't want to. |
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"Of course I don't want" initially considered "to have" as beginning the next line.
For "stopping up loving you" I also considered "giving up my love for you" .
There are several distinct pauses in this poem.
There should be a big gap after the first line.
After that, it is supposed to be read a little faster than most of my poems, almost like a run on sentence in a mild/relaxed and rather monotonous intonation.
Small pause in "a permanent disability / in my heart.
"The word "then," at the end should have some inflection (louder and more energetic for emphasis).