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In my arms is where you’re supposed to be. In my field of vision for me to see. In my life for me to spend time with you. In my reach for me to take care of you. In my thoughts for me to think of you. In my dreams for me to always be with you. In my hands so that I can never let you go. In my marriage vows so that when we wed, you will know. |
Copyright ©2019 Ashi Shadow - 4/17/19 on Shweta.
I had some difficulty with the last lines.
Originally wanted to have the word "marry" in them, but came up with marriage vows and was even happier with that due to the non-whimsical pun of "In."
The in my dreams one is one that I felt was imperfect but okay: the part I did not like was the implication that somehow one was less together outside of dreams.
The "for me to think of you" could be criticized as both lines in the couplet meaning the same thing.
Despite any possible criticisms of this poem, is overall better than I expected it to turn out when I started writing it -- because the second half was more romantic than I expected it to become.
Last line is intended to me mean "you will know I am committed to you" etc.