Here, direct from the MiSTing were our comments:
>Hibichi: Um, maybe we oughta do the C&C
now. Kirin?
>Kirin: *groans*
>Hibichi: Uh, maybe not. Alexis?
>Alexis: Hmm... well, it's kinda hard to
judge a fic like this. It's like those parodies on
>Animaniacs where they take a Disney cartoon
and piss about with it, you know? Only this time
>it's a real Disney cartoon.
>Crow 2: That's BUENA VISTA!
>Alexis: Yeah, whatever. A little
grammar clean up and you might have something servicable.
>Hibichi: Crow 2?
>Crow 2: Leave out the Star Trek humor,
PLEASE.
>Hibichi: Yeah. Well, aside from
the abominable crossover idea it wasn't THAT terrible. But
>you can't take it seriously.
Please note that in the MiSTing, Kirin had slipped on one of our resident SI's books, which is why he doesn't make any commentary. With that, we open the floor. Kirin?
Kirin: I'll have you know that hurt. Still does when the weather gets cold... *ahem* Well, I'm gonna start by saying that this fic was a little more difficult to pinpoint a story line. If the main goal was to make a fic which closely resembled an Animaniacs episode in tone, mission accomplished. In many respects, the whole fic felt like one of those Animaniacs episodes where they royally make fun of some Disney cartoon or another. In that respects, the work was nevertheless flawed. The main problem, of course, is that a sight gag rarely translates well into text. While the gag may be hilarious if viewed, when read it loses a lot of its spontenaity and charm. It wasn't too horribly bad in this fic, though, although it wasn't the greatest stuff in the world. Also, avoid straining for in-gags. Unless you're a real die-hard Trekker, I doubt you'd really find any of the "trek humor" funny and frankly, even with a certain knowledge of Trekology, I found the jokes strained. In terms of plot, well, there isn't really one, it's mostly just a tie-together for the gags. We never get a real explanation for why Demona has kidnapped Elisa and Dr. Scratch n' Sniff in the first place. Plus it's a REALLY WEIRD crossover idea. But since the plot wasn't the main point of this (I think), I 'll let it slide. Alexis?
Alexis: Hmm... well, there were quite a few grammatical errors in the piece, most notably in the intro (which we shouldn't give a damn about anyway!); however, I don't think there were that many pure spelling errors. The piece feels rushed somehow. The language was a bit young, but not nearly as much as we've read in the past, so we can overlook that. Well, that's about all I can say -- Hibichi?
Hibichi: Wow. Geez. Well, Kiki got the characterisation of most of the characters down, that's for certain. The Gargoyles segments weren't quite to the tone of the show, but I think that wasn't the point. I think the only character that really deviates is Dr. Scratch n' Sniff, who seems to have adopted the general Gargoyles "normal" personality (or at least up to the point where he's curled up in a ball in the cage). I don't think he was used very effectively, and only seems to be there as a plot device. Done!
Alexis: Scores for "The Escape:"
Story: 5
Language:
5
Characterization:
7
Depth:
4
Overall:
5. True to the tone of Animaniacs, but not necessarily to the humor
quality.
Now
before you jump down my throat over this justifying yourself, I offer you
this little disclaimer: THIS IS JUST OUR OPINIONS. It's not
gospel fact, it's just some friendly advice. Hell, for all we know
this is the fanfic equivalent of Moby Dick and we just can't comprehend
this. Or in this case, maybe it's the fanfic equivalent of the Discworld
series. I don't know...
Now as we told you, we're not doing the Freon fics just at this moment,
so we're gonna skip ahead again to MiSTie Wars. Granted, it's a bit
wrong of us to do it since we never gained the rights, but I still feel
the author is entitled to an honest review. See you next week!