Here, direct from the MiSTing, was our comments:
>Alexis opened
the critiques this time. "Well everybody?"
> Kirin nodded.
"Not bad at all. It could have been another cheesy superhero crossover,
>but the addition
of the Tick made it all gel that much better."
>"He
got the characterization right for the most part as well," added Hibichi.
"Complete
>with OTT
Tick speeches."
>"Uh,
explain the term 'OTT' for the unknowing out there, Hibichi," Alexis said.
>"OTT:
Over the top," explained Hibichi.
Hmm... didn't go very much into depth, did we? Well, shall we begin Kirin?
Kirin: Incidentally, tell Bodger I still haven't entirely forgiven her for the whole "whiskey" incident... *ahem* As a story, there isn't really anything to it, but I don't think it was intended to be a really deep fic. Had it simply been the X-Men and Sailor Moon, this fic could have just been REALLY boring. But this is clearly the Tick's vehicle; whenever he's there the whole fic just lights up. Otherwise, there isn't a lot of substance to the fic. The fight scene seemed to be the central focus of the fic, and while this is really very typical of an X-Men comic we don't find it particularly interesting. I don't know. Still, we rather liked this fic. Incidentally, I look NOTHING like Omega Red... *glares at others.*
Alexis: Get over it, Kirin. Grammatically, this fic is ALMOST perfect. I say ALMOST because there are points in the fic where the grammar and spelling seems to break down all together. Interestingly, this occurs during the fight with Omega Red... oh well, it's probably not important. Spelling is pretty good, but I can't help but notice Wolverine changes spelling several times during the fic. Strange. That's all from me, now over to Hibichi.
Hibichi: I was recovering from the bruises from that one for a week... Anyhoo, bad point: he included the Usagi stereotype! Boo on you! Other than that, the characterization was pretty solid. In particular, the characters from the Tick were terrific! He had the characters down pat. He even had the Tick's over-the-top speeches, just like the show and comic! Way to go! And incidentally, thanks for not making a big show over Michiru and Haruka's... er, orientation. A lot of fanfics feel it's necessary to overemphasize that. Also, he even managed to make the characters from the X-Men tolerable -- an amazing feat, as none of us here are particularly big fans of theirs. Very good, overall. Alexis?
Alexis: The overall score for Tsuki Ni Kawatte... SPOON, Bub:
Story:
6
Language:
7
Characterization:
9.5
Depth:
5
Overall:
7. Above average. Not a lot of depth, but fantastic characterization.
Now
before you jump down my throat over this justifying yourself, I offer you
this little disclaimer: THIS IS JUST OUR OPINIONS. It's not
gospel fact, it's just some friendly advice. Hell, for all we know
this is the fanfic equivalent of Moby Dick and we just can't comprehend
this. But it is intended to allow a writer to look closer at their
works without having to read the MiSTings. In this case, I wouldn't
worry too much. The guy's got talent.
Join us next week, when we cover Legend of the Triforce!
Kirin: Oy vey, THAT one was annoying...
Alexis: No sneak previews, Kirin. See ya!