Kimagure Orange Road "The Photogenic Girl" Volume 13, Story 6 WB Volume 8, Story 1 Written and illustrated by Matsumoto Izumi Translation by : Larry Greenfield (with special thanks to Hitoshi Doi) Additional translation & full-script typesetting by : Craig Nishida Editing and Additional help by : Paul Hirose Craig Nishida Leo Hourvitz Last revision : 08-26-95 Comments? Corrections? Suggestions? Please send them to: kor-trans@gnu.ai.mit.edu NOTE: WBp#'s are printed first, Normal manga pages in parentheses() NOTE: Translation is done from the WB manga, so there may be a few extras to those of you not having them. Example: The subtitles on page 6 (110) are only in the WBs! --------------------------------------------------- p 6 (110)--TITLE PAGE [A half-portrait of Madoka, done in the style of a charcoal-drawing.] MAIN TITLE (at top) ___________ ______ The Photogenic Girl fotojenikku - ga--ru SUB-TITLE (at bottom) _______ I Want to Color the Canvas YUME miru KOKORO no kambasu o of My Dreaming Heart... to-dream heart 's canvas (O) SOmete-mitai na want-to-color-(and-see) (rhet) With the Color of You... anata IRO... you color --------------------------------------------------- p 7 (111) 1 [Exterior evening shot of the Hiyama residence.] sign: Hiyama HIYAMA 2 [Tight shot of the phone.] phone FX:#RRRR# 3 Mrs. Hiyama: Hikaru, it's a phone call hikaru madoka-san kara DENWA yo from Madoka-san. from-Madoka phone-call 4 [Isolated shot of the closed door to Hikaru's bedroom.] Mrs. Hiyama: [off] Hikaru. hikaru 5 [Half-portrait, 1/4 rear view of Hikaru in her bedroom. She appears somber.] Mrs. Hiyama: [off] Can you hear me? kikoete-ru no Phone call! DENWA yo! --------------------------------------------------- p 8 (112) 1 [Pov shifts to show her face. She looks subdued, looking off-panel.] 2 Hikaru: Tell her I don't want to IMA DEtakunai to itte! talk now! now not-want-to-come-out saying-that 3 [Her mother stares at the closed door.] Mrs. Hiyama: ? ? 4 [Madoka stands at ABCB, in apron, phone in hand.] Madoka: I see. sou desu ka Well... Sorry to bother ja... SHITSUREI shimashita you. then was-rude 5 [Madoka looks down at the phone looking a bit bewildered.] phone receiver FX: ______ kacha_ 6 Master: Ayukawa-kun, a customer! AYUKAWA-kun o-KYAKU-san! Madoka: Okay... ......hai --------------------------------------------------- p 9 (113) 1 [Exterior shot of a store.] Kyousuke: [off] Hey... Which one do you naa... dore ga i-- to OMOu? think is nice? which (S) nice think-that 2 [Inside, Kurumi smiles at a teddy bear she holds up in her hands. Manami watches her and Kyousuke yells.] Kurumi: _____ I like this cute one! atashi kore ga kawaikutte suki_! I this-(one) (S) cute-(and) liking Kyousuke: We didn't come to buy a toy omae no omocha KAi ni kite for you! your-toy coming-to-buy n ja nai n da yo! (nom) are-not (explan) 3 [Manami holds a porcelain cup.] Manami: I think something like this atashi wa kore nanka is nice... I (T) this-(one) the-likes-of i-- to OMOu kedo... nice think-that but 4 [Shot of some fine china displayed on shelves.] Manami: [off] But Ayukawa-san is very AYUKAWA-san tte OTONA ppoi kara mature, so I wonder if she (T) adult-like that's-why wouldn't prefer something ______ that's chic and not just shikku de kazari_KE no nai mono ornamental. chic be-(and) plain/not-ornamental thing no ho-- ga yorokobu n ja nai ka na be-more-pleased (explan/neg) I-wonder Kyousuke: [off] Yeah, but at these prices... un demo kono NEDAN... but this-price ___ It's beyond the reach of ore no kozukai ja o-TEage da yo my allowance. with-my-allowance-(T) throw-up-one's-hands 5 [He holds a porcelain duck in one hand and a china carafe in the other. His sisters cross their arms in obvious annoyance.] Kyousuke: That one! This one! a-- demo nai ko-- demo nai! Kurumi/Manami: Hurry up and decide! HAYAku KImenasai yo fast decide-(command) You've already been like mo-- 2 JIKAN mo so-- yatte that for 2 hours, going already 2-hours too doing-like-that back and forth... mayotte-ru n da kara... are-wavering/ (explan) that's-why vacillating 6 Manami/Kurumi: You indecisive guy!! kono YUUJUUFUDAN otoko_!! this indecisive man Kyousuke: [recoiling] Ulp! gu_! --------------------------------------------------- p 10 (114) 1 [Exterior evening shot of the Kasuga apartment building.] narration: Tomorrow is Ayukawa's ashita wa AYUKAWA no 17-SAI no 17th birthday... tomorrow (T) 's 17th TANJOUBI... birthday 2 [Pov from outside, as he opens the sliding door to the balcony.] sliding door FX: _____ gara_ narration: But... demo... _________ When it comes to presents... iza purezento to naru to... when-it-comes-to when-comes-to-presents I can't easily make up my nakanaka kimerarenai mon de mind. (not)-easily am-not-resolved person being 3 [He stares off into the distance.] narration: What sort of thing would AYUKAWA tte donna mono agetara make Ayukawa happy? (T) what-kind-of-thing if-give yorokonde-kureru n darou be-pleased-(with-me) (poss-explan) Kyousuke: _________ Presents for girls are so ONNA no KO e no purezento tte difficult... to-girls 's present (T) muzukashii naa difficult (rhet) 4 [He turns to look back over his shoulder at Manami.] Manami: What sort of thing does AYUKAWA-san ga donna mono Ayukawa-san want? (S) what-kind-of-thing hoshigatte-ru ka is-wanting (?) ____________ If you're her classmate, kurasume--to no oni--chan dattara oniichan, shouldn't you classmate (nom) if-is naturally know? SHItte-te TOUZEN are-knowing naturally/of-course na n ja nai? is (explan/neg) 5 [He stares at her wide-eyed.] narration: I don't know... SHIranai... Now that you mention it, so-- ieba marukkiri! I have absolutely no idea! come-to-think-of-it completely --------------------------------------------------- p 11 (115) 1 Kyousuke: [yelling] It's *because* I don't wakannai kara ki--te-ru know that I'm asking! not-know that's-why am-asking n ja nai ka! Manami: You don't have to yell. donara nakute mo i-- desho yell unnecessary poss-be 2 [His pov of Manami, who raises a forefinger and smiles.] Manami: But... If that's the demo ne sore dattara... case... but that-(one) if-it-is Then wouldn't it be nice oni--chan no TAISETSU ni shite-ru mono o if you gave her something 's important as/for thing (O) that means a lot to you, oniichan? okureba i-- n ja nai? if-present nice (explan/neg) 3 Kyousuke: ___ Something... That means a ore no...... TAISETSU ni shite-ru mono? lot to me? my important as/for thing 4 [Smiling, she turns and leaves.] Manami: Whatever it is, girls are ONNA no KO tte so-- yu-- no happy about receiving that girls (T) that-kind-of (nom) kind of thing. donna mono demo ureshii mon yo whatever-thing happy person 5 Kyousuke: Hmm... fumu... 6 [He turns to look outside, up at the sky.] Kyousuke: Something that means a TAISETSU na mono... lot... Hmm. nee --------------------------------------------------- p 12 (116) 1 [Takashi enters carrying a huge stack of photo albums.] Takashi: Kyousuke, could you give me KYOUSUKE chotto TETSUDAtte-kurenai ka a hand for a bit? a-bit not-help-(me) (?) 2 [The albums lie piled on the table. Kyousuke looks through one and picks up a picture.] Takashi: I want to arrange these SHIGOTO de totta SHASHIN no files of pics that were for-work taken pictures 's taken for work in order, _____ and... fairu SEIRI shitai n da ga... file want-to-arrange/ (explan) and/but put-in-order 3 Kyousuke: Ah! This is the picture a kore MUKASHI of Ayukawa that Dad took this-(one) long-ago a while back. _____ oyaji ga totta AYUKAWA no SHASHIN! dad (S) taken 's picture 4 Kyousuke: [blushing] (Oh, this is cute!) (a kore kawaii!) 5 [The picture in question--Madoka facial portrait.] 6 Kyousuke: Umm... Can I have this ano~~~~ kono SHASHIN moratte ii? picture? this-picture having okay Takashi: ____ I have the negative, so if nega wa aru kara it's just a print, I don't negatives (T) have that's-why mind. _______ purinto nara kamawan yo print if-it-is not-mind --------------------------------------------------- p 13 (117) 1 [He goes into his bedroom and closes the door behind him. With both hands, he holds the picture to his grinning face.] Kyousuke: (Heh heh... (he he...... I got something nice. i-- mon moratchatta good-thing got-(finality) I'd better take good care TAISETSU ni shi yo!) of it!) door FX: _____ batan 2 [He stares off-panel at his closet, while putting the photo in his shirt pocket.] narration: That's it!! so-- da_!! 3 [He tosses things out of his closet.] Kyousuke FX: ____ ____ gasa goso Kyousuke: (Let's see... (etto... I'm sure it was around TASHIka kono hen ni atta hazu...) here...) certain in-this-area was-here likelihood 4 Kyousuke: Found it! atta! 5 [It's the disqualified picture from chapter 8.2, "The Shutter Chance." Kyousuke catches a smiling Madoka in his arms.] --------------------------------------------------- p 14 (118) 1 [Full-portrait of Madoka runs down the length of this page. She walks down the street in long pants and Herge sweatshirt.] narration: And then, the next day... soshite YOKUJITSU... 2 [Hikaru comes out of a store carrying a huge package in her arms. To her left, Madoka approaches. Madoka sees Hikaru.] awning sign: Writing Materials BUMBOUGU Hikaru: Hup. yoishotto 3 [Hikaru sees Madoka and looks appalled.] awning sign: Stationery BUNGU Hikaru: AH! a! sidewalk sign: ______ Copies--15 yen. kopi-- 15-EN 4 [Hikaru runs off and hides around a corner.] Madoka: Hika... hika... Hikaru FX: _____ sasa_ --------------------------------------------------- p 15 (119) 1 [Looking worriedly over her shoulder, Hikaru runs off.] Hikaru footsteps FX: ___ ___ ___ ta_ ta_ ta_ 2 Madoka: ? ? 3 [Exterior daytime shot of the Kasuga apartment building.] phone FX: [off] #RRRR# 4 [Kurumi answers it.] Kurumi: Yes, hello! hai moshimoshi! Ah, Hikaru-chan?! a hikaru-chan?! Huh? Oniichan? e oni--chan? 5 [Holding her phone, Hikaru blushes in surprise to hear...] phone: Oniichan? oni--chan nara _____ He's in the TOILET right IMA toire ni haitte-ru yo now. now in-toilet is-entering The big one! o--kii yatsu! 6 [Sitting on the toilet with pants rolled down, Kyousuke slaps a palm to his forehead.] Kyousuke: ____ (You... Idiot.) (ano... baka) 7 [Hikaru smiles nervously.] phone: Shall I go call him? yonde-koyo-- ka? Hikaru: Ahh... No, that's okay. a...iya ii wa yo --------------------------------------------------- p 16 (120) 1 Hikaru: Sempai's father had the ano... SEMPAI no oto--sama tte opportunity to take some 's father (T) pictures of Madoka-san and me before, didn't he... IZEN atashi ya madoka-san no before I and 's SHASHIN totte-kureta koto atta desho pictures taken-(for-us) case poss-had 2 [Kurumi smiles.] phone: So please, I need one of soko de o-negai madoka-san no SHASHIN Madoka-san's pictures... so/then please 's picture ICHI-MAI hoshii n da kedo... one-(counter) want/need (explan) but Kurumi: Sure. Okay! un i-- yo! I'll have oniichan deliver oni--chan ni todokesaseru!! it!! by-oniichan make-deliver 3 [Face flushed, Kyousuke stomps into the room. Kurumi turns to look.] Kyousuke: You. Don't humiliate me. omae HAJIkakaseru na yo you don't-put-to-shame/disgrace _______ ____ I'll lose my image! ime--ji - daun mo i-- toko da ze image down too good-point is ! Kurumi: [blankly] _______ ____ ______ "Losing one's image" are ime--ji - daun tte suteki na HITO ni words used to describe image down (quote) by-great-people great people. TAIshite TSUKAu KOTOBA yo in-regard-to use words 4 Kurumi: [matter-of-factly] For you, oniichan, there is kore IJOU sagariyo-- mo nai nothing more to lose... beyond-this decline there-is-nothing oni--chan de wa...... by-oniichan (contrast) [Kyousuke gets in her face.] Kyousuke: BY THE WAY, WHAT DID SHE tokoro-de nanno YOU da WANT? by-the-way what-kind-of-business is tte? (quote) 5 [She stares up at the ceiling, in thought.] Kurumi: .......... .......... 6 [She smiles in embarrassment.] Kurumi: I forgot. WASUrechatta Kyousuke: That's why you're useless. anta wa sore da kara you (T) that-(one) therefore komaru be-at-a-loss 7 Kurumi: Oh yeah, that's right. a so-- so-- She said something about nanka oni--chan ni kite hoshii wanting you to come by! something by-oniichan want-to-come n da tte! (explan) (quote) Kyousuke: [smiling] Then she probably said that ja tabun AYUKAWA no tokoro ni we'll go to Ayukawa's place then probably to-Ayukawa's-place together. ISSHO ni iko-- tte koto together shall-go (quote) (nom) na n da na is (explan) --------------------------------------------------- p 17 (121) 1 [Another view of the picture of Madoka carried in his arms.] 2 [He holds it in both hands and studies it.] narration: Anyway... tonikaku... _________ I've decided on the purezento wa KImatta shi... present... present (T) decided and-besides Let's go!! itte-miyo-- ka!! shall-go-and-see (?) 3 [He puts the picture in his shirt pocket.] picture FX: ___ su_ 4 [Closing the front door behind him, he smiles and pats his shirt pocket.] door FX: _____ batan narration: Heh heh... he he... ___ This picture is the most kono SHASHIN ore no ICHIBAN TAISETSU na important thing to me... this-picture my most-important mono... thing I'll give it to Ayukawa! kore o AYUKAWA ni ageru this-(one) (O) to-Ayukawa give n da! (explan) 5 [A view across a street at some stores.] --------------------------------------------------- p 18 (122) 1 [Exterior daytime shot of the Hiyama residence.] sign: Hiyama HIYAMA 2 [Hikaru answers the door. Kyousuke smiles.] Kyousuke: Hello-o-o. konchi wa~~ 3 [Surprising him, she drags him inside by the wrist.] Hikaru: Hurry, hurry! HAYAku HAYAku Hikaru/Kyousuke FX: ____ ____ dota dota 4 [His pov of her head as she continues to drag him along behind her.] Hikaru: Now, hurry and give me the saa HAYAku DAshite-kudasai SHASHIN! picture, please! quickly bring-out-(please) picture 5 Kyousuke: EH? e? 6 [Stopping, she looks back at him with a serious expression.] Hikaru: You brought Madoka-san's madoka-san no SHASHIN motte-kita picture, didn't you? 's picture brought n desho? (poss-explan) Kyousuke FX: _____ giku_ --------------------------------------------------- p 19 (123) 1 [A horrified look comes to his face.] narration: Wh-what? na nan da H-how does Hikaru-chan do do--shite hikaru-chan ga know? why (S) SHItte-ru n da? is-knowing (explan) I-I see. so so-- ka That Kurumi must have kurumi no yatsu shaberi-yagatta na!! blabbed it!! that-Kurumi chattered-(contempt) 2 [A view looking back down the hall to the front door.] Hikaru: [off] Hurry and show it to me, HAYAku misete-kudasai! please! fast show-(please) narration: I can't very well show her ano SHASHIN o miseru that picture!! that-picture (O) show wake ni wa ikanai yo!! can't-very-well Kyousuke: [off] N-no... i iya... 3 [With a smile, Hikaru reaches over to the photo sticking out of his shirt pocket.] Hikaru: Ah, this is it! a kore desu ne_! Kyousuke: AH! a_ 4 [He tries to grab it, but she deftly snatches it away.] Kyousuke: N-no!! da dame_!! Hikaru FX: ____ hyoi 5 [She loses her grip on it and it falls to the floor.] photo FX: _____ hara_ 6 [They both stare down at it.] Kyousuke: ___ AH! ha_ --------------------------------------------------- p 20 (124) 1 [She kneels to pick it up.] 2 [Kyousuke can only stare in horror.] Kyousuke: (I-it's all over-r-r!!) (o o-shimai daa~~~~~~_!!) 3 [His portrait of Hikaru as she turns the picture over and studies it.] 4 Hikaru: [smiling] Hmm! fumu! It sure is Sempai's father!! sasuga SEMPAI no oto--sama ne!! truly/indeed 's father (rhet) He took a great one... umaku torete-ru... well is-able-to-take-(a-pic) 5 Kyousuke: EH?! e_ 6 Hikaru: I didn't have a picture atashi madoka-san no ii HYOUJOU of Madoka-san with a nice I 's nice-facial-expression expression on her face... shite-ru SHASHIN tte motte-nakute... is-doing picture (T) not-having I remembered that your SEMPAI no oto--sama ni totte-itadaita father took some pictures, by-your-father taken-(for-me) and asked Kurumi-chan. no OMOiDAshite kurumi-chan ni (nom) remember-(and) to-Kurumi tanondoita n desu requested-(for-future-sake) (explan) --------------------------------------------------- p 21 (125) 1 [Kyousuke leans over Hikaru's shoulder to look at the picture.] 2 [It's the first photo. A facial portrait of a smiling Madoka.] 3 [He nervously and with wide eyes reaches for his shirt pocket.] narration: Oh, I see. a so--ka This picture... kono SHASHIN... Come to think of it, I so-- ieba kino-- put it in this pocket come-to-think-of-it yesterday yesterday and left it _______ there... kono poketto ni Ireta mama in-this-pocket put-in as-it-is datta n da... was (explan) 4 [Hikaru leads the way into her bedroom.] Hikaru: ________ The details should go well kore de dite--ru ga umaku iku hazu! with this! with-this details (S) well should-go door FX: ______ gacha_ 5 [Standing before an easel, she puts on an apron. Kyousuke stares.] Hikaru: Now for... The finishing sate to... SAIGO no shiage da! touches! well finishing-touches are 6 [A view of Hikaru's drawing. It is an excellent half-portrait of Madoka.] --------------------------------------------------- p 22 (126) 1 [Kyousuke stares wide-eyed.] 2 Kyousuke: Wowww! hee----_ Hikaru-chan, you're a great hikaru-chan tte E umai n da ne! artist! (T) drawing skillful (explan) Hikaru: [beaming] Eh heh! ufu! Really? so-- desu kaa? I like drawing a lot. atashi kekko-- E o kaku notte I quite draw taking-part-in SUki na n desu yo liking (explan) 3 Hikaru: This is my birthday kore ga atashi no madoka-san e present to Madoka-san! this-(one) (S) my to-Madoka _________ _________ no ba--sudei - purezento! (nom) birthday-present 4 [Another view of the drawing.] narration: What a surprise! korya odoroki...! 5 [He leans in real close to get a good view of the drawing.] Kyousuke: ...... Yeah. It's a good ......un yoku NIte-ru likeness. Hikaru: ______ If I asked her to be a moderu ni natte-kure nante model, I'm sure she'd feel into-model turn-into-(for-me) the-likes-of embarrassed and refuse. tanondara kitto HAzukashigatte if-ask surely feel-embarrassed-(and) KOTOWArarechau shi be-refused-(finality) and-besides And just from my mind's eye, SOUZOU dake ja imaichi it doesn't quite look like by-just-imagination-(T) lack-something her, y'know. NInai n desu yo ne not-resemble (explan) (rhet) 6 narration: I've discovered a secret hikaru-chan no kakureta talent of Hikaru-chan! 's hidden/unknown SAINOU HAKKEN! talent discovery Kyousuke: _____ Why don't you become a manga manga-KA ni demo nattara? artist? into-manga-artist or-something if-become Hikaru: [delighted] C'mon-n-n! ya da~~~~_! Really, Sempai! SEMPAI ttara --------------------------------------------------- p 23 (127) 1 [Exterior shot of ABCB.] 2 [Madoka holds up the drawing and looks at it, visibly happy and surprised.] Madoka: Wahhh. This is for me?! waa kore atashi ni?! this-(one) for-me 3 Master: Wowww! It's really good. he----_ umai mon ja nai ka wow skillful thing Hikaru: [embarrassed] Ohh! he--_ 4 Hikaru: I've been drawing all night kino-- kara TETSUYA de kaite-ta since yesterday. from-yesterday in-overnight was-drawing n desu (explan) I was worried that I maniawanai ka to OMOtchatta! wouldn't finish in time! not-be-in-time was-worried-that-(finality) Madoka: You went to a lot of taihen datta no ne! trouble! serious/difficult was 5 Madoka: So that's why you didn't sore de DENWA ni DEnakattari come to the phone, and and-so to-phone-call was-not-coming- gave me the cold shoulder out-(and) when we met... Atte-mo sokkenakattari shita even-tho-meet was-cold/brusque-(and) wake... reason Hikaru: I'm sorry... suimasen... 6 Madoka: Thank you, Hikaru! hikaru arigato! I'll treasure this!! TAISETSU ni suru wa!! --------------------------------------------------- p 24 (128) 1 [Kyousuke's pov as the other three turn to look at him.] Hikaru: By the way, Sempai, are tokoro-de SEMPAI wa? you...? by-the-way (T) Hikaru/Master/Madoka FX: jiro_ 2 [He stands and imitates a deer caught in the headlights.] 3 Kyousuke: [nervously] _ ___ M-me? o...ore? 4 [He holds a hand to his shirt pocket.] narration: I give up. maitta na I can't possibly hand over hikaru-chan no MAE ja totemo that picture in front of in-front-of-Hikaru-(T) not...possibly-at-all Hikaru-chan... ano SHASHIN watasenai yo naa that-picture can't-hand-over (rhet) 5 [He winks and waves at Hikaru while turning to leave.] Kyousuke: ___ Ah... I forgot it. a...ore WASUrete-kichatta I went-and-forgot-(finality) I-I'll just go and get it chi chotto tori ni itte-kuru yo real quick. a-bit going-to-go-for-(a-thing) narration: I'll somehow substitute nantoka hoka no mono de something else and secretly somehow by-another-thing give her the picture later on... Right?! o-CHA o nigoshite SHASHIN wa tea (O) make-turbid-(and) picture (T) GOJITSU sotto... ne! later-on secretly (rhet) 6 [He returns to the cash register, where Madoka stands, and reaches for his shirt pocket.] Kyousuke: Oh yeah, that's right. a so-- so-- ________ I'll pay for the coffee toriaezu ko--hi-- DAI for now. for-the-time-being coffee fee/fare harattoku yo pay-(for-future-sake) Madoka: You can do that later! sonna... ato de i-- wa yo! that-kind-of afterwards okay --------------------------------------------------- p 25 (129) 1 [He pulls out his wallet, and a photo comes out.] photo FX: _____ poro_ 2 [The two of them watch as it flutters down to the counter.] 3 [It lands face-down.] writing on back of photo: To Ayukawa. AYUKAWA e Happy Birthday. TANJOUBI omedetou 4 [Blushing, he turns and hightails it out the door.] Kyousuke: ________ Ah, th-that's for the a so sore ko--hi-- DAI! coffee! that-(one) coffee fee Keep it! tottoite! B-bye!! ji jaa ne!! door FX: _____ karan 5 [Madoka smiles gently as she turns the photo over and studies it in her hands.] narration: May 25th... 5-GATSU 25-NICHI... Starting today, Ayukawa AYUKAWA madoka KYOU kara 17-SAI! Madoka is 17! from-today 17-years ---------------------------------------------------