bt3
Mood:  amorous
Topic: translation's back


Room Service

bought tap-on shoes [commodity strained outline] ties we keep [unit: idiom] our time noon the pepper or salt [convenience stations] of dome vial chrome offenders [state regulated ceremonies] saddle [emblems of geography] in the noodle lip [freeze frame] service oh [speech act, congealed] in next cages primacy [zoology and psychic movement] jot an increasing clamber [crowd control] die for to is or go [capital and canons] between seance [Celtic mythologies] protein of end bamboo [neuroscience shot into botany] brahtwurst be swerve [classism & dialectical physiques] bowler hats were of [decade(nt) & Cuvier] instead not [double negative allegory] riddle flood congregants [baptism sought as adaptive technology]

bt2
Topic: translation's back


Auxiliaries would lend coffee[favor of grammar] never been as trying [personal anecdote in the form of a tunnel] expectation in the personage [speechified but necessary] marvelous unduly [faint praise] atrophied a truce the torrent of man [soothsaying incorporated] yellow median midstroke [painterly gears]
in medium build of midlife [physiological suggestions] middling of tugs [middle english] wrench spaces of platform leather [lifestyle vivisection] the tether shown in straw caps donkeys [ancient dusty microhistories in waiting] adumbrated to point out oratorical advances [on the edge of discourse deixis & the Ciceronian dialogue]

So what I did here is lay over some interruptions where I found the thing wanting (a lot of wanting is in the appearance)

bt1
Mood:  accident prone
Topic: translation's back


"hygiene hands rolling two another throat
quick violence metal unroll spurt stop
norse limbo in hands blast paper toilet cards
christmas survey of"


my idea is to move backwards against the grain
eventually start emphasizing relative words
right now

1)a little heavy on nouns
2)very light on connections, articles.
3) i want the last word to be the title
4) question the movement. punctuations right now
heavily interrupted phrasing. torn up staccato.
5) resistance / pressure
6) i like paper toilet as an idea for sculpture.

that's about it for this first try.