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In a world that had become covered with cobwebs, you beat back the shadows of variegated life; revealing the veiled splendor of sunburst warmth. The world genuflects to your perfection, and with your blessing, learns to dance until it's dizzying. |
Copyright ©2013 Ashi Shadow -1/2/13 on PM
--> First line is giving me trouble. Considered "Shadows exist, // but", and now have considered "In a world that had become covered with cobwebs,"
unveiling instead of revealing?
--> considered "learns to dance" really means learns to spin with its arms out wide.
--> the 2nd stanza is not how it was originally intended to be. After the first two lines were written, I decided to change the tone of it. Originally it was intended to be more somber and more about contentedness than joyous glee.
--> "veiled splendor" really means that its splendor was veiled before she revealed it.
--> the words "it's dizzying" means that the dance itself has a dizzying effect, but could also be interpreted (acceptably) as the world itself becoming dizzying ("giddy").