| The roaring of the train; in my head a woman screams. I remember when Vicki screamed at me, on the phone, telling me to go in when I was standing outside in a lightning storm. What was it like to be loved like that? I don't remember anymore. *spreads out his arms, and rides with no hands by the tracks.* |
*** ; was originally a comma *** The Lin: That's... interesting. It's giving me mixed feelings about its meaning> It partially sounds wistful, like you wish it would happen again, and it partially sounds pleased, like 'so now I can be recklass' Me: well, the 2nd part is wholely unintentional, heh : P It's more like being reckless in an attempt to push the boundries as far as they are now, to remember what it was like when boundries were actually there Me: if anything, although I don't know if that's even an accurate portrayal, I never even though about that half of it *** I feel like "telling" should be begging, but that seems too desperate. Maybe pleading. *** The Lin: I think the abrupt change after "I don't remember anymore" The Lin: Gives a mild 'Eh, oh well." feeling Me: Hmm it's not intended to be abrupt. Maybe I need to add an adverb like 'slowly' in to make it seem less sudden. *** Me: The roaring of the train was literal, I was biking on a road parallel to the train but not actually next to it, so I could see the train above me, it was loud and had its horn or whatever Me: somehow those sounds had an "urgency" reminded me of a scream, like a situation where one would expect to hear someone scream, just with the surrounding loud noises, seemed like some kind of dire situation Me: which reminded me of a person named Vicki whom I once was rather close to marrying (this was several years before you encountered me) Me: there was a day when I was outside talking to her on a cordless phone in the yard with a big lightning storm booming above me Me: and she pleaded for me to go inside despite my replies to her entreats as being "there's nothing to worry about, it's not dangerous" but I was somewhat teasing her and then went inside in the end (it really wasn't dangerous though, I only went inside because she wanted that and I didn't want her to feel uncomfortable and worried)