PILOT - Paradise Awaits. Beware!
An animated series for television.
Written by Corey Young
EXT. OCEAN - DAY
The sun is out and beaming warm rays over the entire scene. A motorized boat drifts along the sea.
EXT. BOAT - DAY
Standing at the wheel of the boat with a concentrated look on his face is OWEN DANIELS, a Melbourne born 20 year old male with shortish, scruffy brown hair. He wears a green T-shirt, jeans and blue sneakers. Behind him, at the side of the boat and taking in her vast surroundings is LESLIE, a Melbourne born 22 year old female with neck-length black hair, a short pony-tail tied at the bottom. She wears a sleeveless black top and grey pants. A warm smile on her face, she turns to Owen and approaches him from behind. Leslie wraps her arms around his waist and rests her head on his shoulders, closing her eyes as she hugs him. Owen noticeably grimaces.
LESLIE
So, are we going anywhere in particular or
are we going to go on until we’ve circled the world?
OWEN
What do you mean?
LESLIE
Well, we’ve been drifting for ages now.
LESLIE (CONT’D)
I can’t even see the shore anymore.
INT. MEMORY HALL - DAY
A yellow wall. Three blue doors are evenly spaced on it. Centred and in bold writing on the wall is a sign reading: MEMORIES. On each door is a small sign with a number on it. From left to right, the doors are marked “MEMORY 7459241”, “MEMORY 7459242” and “MEMORY 7459243”. The middle door opens, a blinding white light emanating from it. ZOOM in to the light until it has engulfed the screen.
INT. PAT’S LOUNGE ROOM - DAY
A student’s lounge room. A couch is the centre-piece of the room. Behind it is a stereo system and a large rack of CD’s. Random posters adorn the walls promoting the bands MILKMAID, FIREWITCH, THE UNION and DOCTOR INVISIABLO. There are also decorated patterns, painted murals around. Sitting on the couch is PAT, a 20 year old white male with long red hair. He sits back comfortably, wearing old jeans and a blue T-shirt. He is holding a lit joint, smoke softly drifting from it. Ahead of him, Owen paces back and forth tensely.
PAT
A girlfriend?
OWEN
I am, most of the time. It’s just lately, I dunno.
It’s the same way I started feeling about underpants
before I ditched them for boxers.
INT. LOUNGE ROOM - DAY (BACK TO PRESENT)
Pat now has a white board with a giant graph next to him on the couch. He points to the line on the graph, which rises steadily along its course. Owen watches.
PAT
Yes, and...
OWEN
Forget the graphs! Don’t you have any advice for me?
PAT
They could have flushed! But anyway, that’s
not the point. Be good to her, man.
OWEN
I know. I have to be sensitive. I don’t
want her to hate me.
EXT. BOAT - DAY
ZOOM out from Owen’s head until we reach a MS of him and Leslie. Owen stops the boat and shrugs.
ANGLE - PREVIOUS
Owen shakes his head.
LESLIE
We’re on a boat, in the middle of the
ocean, all by ourselves. Is there any
special reason for this?
INT. MEMORY HALL 2 - DAY
The wall of Leslie’s memory room is pink with various paintings of flowers and little murals about. Three doors are evenly spaced across the wall. Above them, centred is a sign reading: MEMORIES. On each door is a small label listing the number of the memory. From left to right, the three doors read: “MEMORY 9482530”, “MEMORY 9482531” and “MEMORY 9482532”. The left door opens and emanates a blinding white light. ZOOM in on it until the light has engulfed the entire frame.
INT. FRIEND’S LOUNGE - DAY
A student’s lounge. Leslie stands by a desk that has several papers and a phone on it. She is midway through hanging up the phone when the scene begins. After hanging up, she turns to her FRIEND who sits on a couch looking at Leslie.
FRIEND
A boat trip? What for?
LESLIE
He said he has something important
to talk about. I wonder what it is...
LESLIE
Yes.
EXT. OCEAN - DAY
Shot of wave increasing in size, becoming giant. It approaches the boat which is in the distance.
EXT. BOAT - DAY
Leslie waits expectantly as Owen tries to find the right words.
EXT. OCEAN - DAY
Shot of Leslie hitting the water hard, her head crashing into the ocean. Then a shot of Owen landing face first, blood trickling from his nose with the impact.
WS of the ocean, the boat capsized. The giant wave continues on its path, decreasing gradually in size.
EXT. NEWTOPIA BEACH - DAY
The water calmly rolls up to the beach, then eases away. We watch this process repeat three times before both Leslie and Owen are washed in. They are apparently unconscious. After a few moments, Leslie starts coughing up water. MCU on her as she pushes herself up on to her hands and knees and coughs up water. She vomits a little as she gasps for breath. When finished, she collapses, rolling over onto her back. Taking in all the fresh air she can handle, it is a few moments before her head turns and she notices Owen only metres away. Her eyes narrow. Painfully, she forces herself up onto her hands and knees again. She crawls over to Owen and clutches his wrist. She feels his pulse and then drops his arm. She rests both hands on his chest and pushes down 5 times, obviously exhausted. Once the 5 count is over, she leans in to Owen, opens his mouth and gives mouth to mouth. She repeats this process four times before Owen finally coughs. She rolls him over slightly and water dribbles out from his mouth. A few coughs pass before his eyes open. Tired, he turns and sees Leslie. His eyes widen and then take in their surroundings.
WS of the beach. Owen’s P.O.V shot of the ocean. MS of Leslie and Owen, lying beside each other.
FADE TO BLACK.
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