Just to let you know I really enjoyed your story Passing Through Gethesemene. I really liked the bonding between Harry and Kathryn. I have really enjoyed all of your stories, please keep writing!!-J/C Forever!!

I loved this story. It presented Harry Kim as we know and love him. Sometimes innocent. Sometimes hard and worldly. Yet, always doing what he himself believes is the right thing, especially when it involves his captain.

Shalee

I can only think of one word to say BEAUTIFUL. I enjoyed this story so much. thank you for sharing.

Lori

Hey, I just finished, "Passing Through Gethsemane". Wow! That was the best! I have read hundreds of fics about Kathryn and Chakotay having a child, but yours has to be the most wonderful! You told the story with such beauty, and I thought the finality to it would never come. It was very complex; really fantastic! Thank you for writing, Lauren

Hi Heather -

I just finished your latest story, "Passing Through Gathesmane." All in all it was well written, and it kept me reading. But I did find a few grammer errors within the text, as if you didn't proof your work. From one writer to another, you need to check your grammer and spelling. For instance, the word you repeatedly missed, Phasor- is actually, phaser. And I noticed "payed" should have been "paid." The story flowed, but I was also confused when you switched from 3rd to 1st person. Or, like I was reading your outline of the story and it wasn't translated properly. On the whole, it was a wonderful story, but I think you should proof your story a couple of times before posting it and spellcheck it as well. I do the same thing for each and every story before it makes it to my site.

I hope you don't mind the critique, but I felt it was necessary since I noticed quite a bit of promise in your writing.

Keep up the good work,

Judy

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