ok welcome to the review 1 page! the reviews are taken directly from the reviewing site, no changes or edits made. this was when our first layout was up (here)
The mistakes here are large and noticeable! The border bg is inconsistent, wider in some places due to the picture on top. The right border is barely visible. That's really ugly. The text goes over it in some places. The gray text on the image is really hard to read. Get rid of the picture. Make the bg one colour. The 'link to us' text is a dark blue, impossible to read. Go take notes from Jadeite's new article. The button is an unusual size, and the text goes over the pictures, making it not worth the effort to read it.
Sailor Pluto-the same mistakes with the bg are made here. Red text does not work on a black bg. There is the doll box stats and basic plot info. *yawn*
Sailor Neptune-the text on the title banner goes over her face. That's just wrong. Honestly, what are these people thinking? The symbol bg is the same colour as the text. ggrrrr....
Neptune and Uranus-I like the title banner. The text still goes over into the bg. I really dislike centered text, especially one liners. It's so ugly. There is a reason books are not centered. The pictures are good, I wonder where the author got them, as there are no credits.
Sailor Uranus-at least they are consistent. Same bg and text mistakes. There really isn't much content at this site.
Sailor Saturn-just as I suspected, dark purple on black. Impossible to read. Do people even look at their sites after they publish them?
The Home button is nice, I haven't seen it before. Thank god its not from Lycentia.
Overall, I liked the fact that the graphics were not freeware. There isn't much content, and what's there is dead confusing. The same mistake were made, so once that is fixed, with more content, this won't be so bad a site.
WAITAMINUTE!! there's more. There are two links I didn't see the first time, Introduction and Images. See what a bad idea that image map is? -_-
Images-The title banner covers Haruka and Michiru's faces. baaaddd...
Same bg mistake. There are not that many images, which surprised me as there are tons of the outers. The images are well organized with proper thumbnails. Good!
Introduction-odd that this is the last section I see. That should be in place of Menu on the image map. This time Pluto and Neptune's faces are covered. Do they have something against Neptune? A broken image and more impossible to read text. yay. The Outer Senshi, are part of the Sailor Scouts in Sailor Moon. That sentence is so wrong...
"The four Outer senshi are members of a larger team of Sailor senshi in the anime called Sailor Moon." The word senshi means soldier. It should not be capitalized. Yeah, I do it too sometimes, but still.
Sailor Uranus and Neptune guarded the outskirts of the Universe for aliens
Nope, the outskirts of our solar system, not the whole universe. It's 'from aliens' not 'for aliens', that would mean they were working for the aliens.
Defence is spelled with a c. Please differentiate information from the anime and the manga. I got all confused.
Uh...this is where the 'overall' part goes but I did that allready...so...yeah.
Info is too confusing, mixing sources, boring unoriginal info, horrible layouts....this site gets a dead fish to the head. *thwack!*
The main page layout looks a bit busy, and on my screen the left-hand border starts to repeat itself, making the entire thing too messy for my taste.
The welcome text is also a bit hard to read where it goes over the Saturn image, as is the help text to the image map. And the rotating 3d-text is just... wrong. Fix your layout, please!
And one the imagemap, introduction should be at the top.
The Pluto page suffers from the same problem as the main page when it comes to the background. It's to narrow! All background images should be at least 1000 pixels wide, if they're not meant to be tiled horizontally. The logo is also very spotted, please try to save it in higher quality.
There's a broken image here, probably because it's an .art file, which don't agree to well with Netscape. (In IE, it seems like a picture that would make a really nice transparent gif)
The stats are booooring, and the biography is a bit unorganized. I have a hard time following it, especially when you start mixing manga and anime at the end.
Saturns page is *bleep*-ing impossible to read. Lighten your text, now!
Also, Saturn is not the Senshi of Destruction and Death (at least not in the original) but can be called either the Senshi of Death and *Rebirth* (something people seem to forget all the time), Destruction or the Senshi Blessed by the Planet of Silence. Take your pick, but don't forget that one of her apsects are also healing and rebirth.
In the summary, you mix info from both the anime and manga, managing to write it so that hardly anything is correct.
Saturn doesn't turn into Mistress 9, she is possessed by her!
The end of S comes from the manga, but the SuperS info is purely anime (they show up in the manga!). Also, in the manga "Death Reborn Revolution" actually destroys the world, but Sailor Moon saves it.
And we don't get to know what happens to Saturn in Crystal Tokyo in the anime. Separate and correct that which is faulty.
The little tridents on Neptune's page make the text hard to see.
Errors in the bio: Uranus and Neptun do not guard the outer universe, merely the outer solar-system. And what does "In the present time you first see her again, Sailor Uranus" mean?
Here you have made a distinction between the anime and manga, but I'd suggest making two entirely separate bios. The stories diverse enough for that, and your writing is still confusing when it's all in one big chunk.
Sailor Uranus page has the best-looking banner sofar. The stats are extremely boring, and the bio, while better then the previous, is confusing. It is not Haruka's dream to become a racer, she already is one. The grammar isn't exactly perfect either, and we do *not* get to know what the Outers are doing in Crystal Tokyo! They aren't even mentioned, dammit!
I like the page about Uranus and Neptune's relationship, but you've managed to mix the manga and anime again (I'm getting tired of writing this)
And please, do mention that their convertion to Galaxia's side was merely a ploy to try and kill her. And for the last time, we DON'T KNOW THE FUTURE! Nothing is said about the Outer senshi in Crystal Tokyo.
Ugly banner in the gallery, but at least there's real thumbnails. And lots of .art files, please convert them to something else, or many visitors won't see them.
No image credits! (yes, I will bitch about this in every review I write) And no comments about the pics either. That would be nice, especially in a 'tribute' shrine like this. Makes everything more personal, you know?
Lastly, the intro (shouldn't this be like on the top?)
The first image, not counting the banner, is broken, and since I'm on IE I think it's an error in coding.
The text would be a lot easier to read if it didn't go over the border. Create wider margins, please.
The summary is pretty good, except for several grammatical errors. Get a beta-reader for your pages.
Most people I know like Outers, wheter it's anime or manga. Maybe not always Michiru, but the other three are quite popular.
I think you should add Sailor Saturn's Silence Glaive, maybe besides or below the talismans, since the fact that all outer senshi have items (as opposed to the inner) is quite important.
You still mix manga and anime way too much.
That's it. Quite a boring page, with really bad design. Many things need to be fixed here before they can become a trustable source of information.
/Jadeite