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For my portfolio I have chosen to rewrite my Unit two and three papers. Unit two was the paper on the schools back to school party “the pre cram jam” and unit three was the analysis of a magazine. These papers were the two I really enjoyed writing, but also felt needed more improvement. I chose to rewrite my unit two assignment because I felt a had a good start on it, but the paper seemed a little unfinished, it definitely needed some polishing and it felt as though I’d left things with it unfinished. I wanted to finish off this paper as best I could. I changed sentences here and there, added sentences, edited sentences, changed my conclusion, fixed errors, used the suggestions you made on my paper. I also added things I felt needed to be in the paper. Another reason I chose to rewrite Unit 2 was because unit two was written about three months ago and I wanted to see how I have grown as a writer, and try to use the skills I have gained in this class to re write one of my earlier papers. I also wanted to write my Unit three paper, which was the paper analyzing a magazine, I chose to analyze Bust magazine. The reason I wanted to rewrite this paper because I feel this paper was good, but could also be improved. This was my favorite paper to write, and I wanted to re-work it to perfection. I used your suggestions on how to make the paper better, and changed also what I felt needed to be changed; I added and edited a lot of things. I also added more information on feminism and Bust’s particular brand of modern feminism. I felt that this needed to be added to the paper, for more of a feel of what the magazine is all about. In conclusion I feel I have learned a lot about writing in this course, which I use to re write two of my earlier papers written in this course. I plan on taking these new writing skills with me in my career of composition.